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Member Since	10/26/2007
Last Online	10/09/2008
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Website/Blog:	whispers.sosblog.com
About Myself:	There isn't much to say about myself. The reason why I write has a lot to do with that. My life is so boring that I write to create a more fascinating world for me to live in. Welcome to that world.

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Published Short Stories

Date	Title	Category	Hits
Oct 5, 2008	Down Time	Poetry	66
Jun 17, 2008	I Thought of You Today	Poetry	155
May 30, 2008	what qualifies a child?	Poetry	96
May 30, 2008	the play	Poetry	96
Apr 25, 2008	Sanity	Miscellaneous Stories	199

Comments

Total number of comments: 16

Title article: Come Get Your Trailer
Date: 2008-10-09 10:56:20

That was totally amusing. I loved the way you told it, and the interesting outcome. Excellent humor piece.

Title article: Down Time
Date: 2008-10-06 18:12:42

Ruby Whispers was close...
Down time refers to the roller coaster of the relationship. How sometimes, he's so perfect that it's a rollercoaster peak. Down time is when he acts like a jerk and I feel used and like an idiot. Down time is when I'm down about myself, and feeling at the bottom.

Title article: How Far
Date: 2008-10-05 19:23:04

Comparing history to one day kind of reminded me of that riddle of the sphinx. The one that compares a human life to a day and says something like "What walks on four feet at the beginning of the day, two at noon, and three in the evening?"
Nice rhyming. Just so you know, rhyming has to be impressive for me to like it. None of that childhood rhyming with easy little phrases. I liked it and it rhymed. So good job.

P.S. The "then" between "vanity" and "fighting" in stanza number five should be "than".

Title article: Secrets of St. Margaret's (final)
Date: 2008-09-24 09:01:43

I think that the reason the governor confessed was because he more or less assumed Brad already knew, since Governor Llyod Brandon believed Brad to be Wellington back from the dead. In short, the governor didn't think he was confessing.
I caught some grammar mistakes too, but I tend not to talk about them because I'm a weird English nut and nobody really wants to know what I have to say about grammar.
Excellent story, but I kind of saw the recorder thing coming, but still. I didn't think the governor did it until he got into the whole handwriting thing. Good plot.

Title article: Secrets of St. Margaret's (part 2)
Date: 2008-09-22 13:06:09

Do you know?
Do you know where this story is going, or is it keeping you in suspense too? Do you have a plan or outline to go from or are you making it up as you go?

Title article: The Waitress
Date: 2008-09-21 17:47:41

Holy cow. Never saw that one coming. Excellent story. Twisted mind.

Title article: Comforting Memories
Date: 2008-09-18 18:40:23

Let me just say that I got goose-bumps from that. Nice job with the flashback. One suggestion, maybe you could make the title reflect the love of airplanes as well?

Title article: The Piano And Her
Date: 2008-08-31 17:06:57

Simply poignant.
I agree with resistanceisfreedom, there is no WAY that was too wordy. It was AMAZING. But like Harmattan said, I could almost WATCH it. You definitely shared the scene clearly. And you should definitely keep writing.

Title article: 2 Poems of Her
Date: 2008-08-31 16:56:25

When I first started writing poetry, I was really into rhyme, but then again, I was, like, twelve, so that's understandable. Now, rhyme needs to be really something to impress me. So I wasn't too fond of the first couple lines of "Passing Souls." But when I kept reading, I liked the rest(well, minus the rhyming anyway). The "i wallow in addicted misery" was VERY good. It was a very speaking line. The last two lines "Some souls must pass each other a few times on times eternal flight/before coming together just right" reminded me of a book I read. In case you're curious it's called "Criss-cross". It kind of had the same idea that you had at the end.
In both your poems, you do a great job of putting pictures in readers' heads, but you do it especially well in the second one.

Title article: Something about confusion
Date: 2008-06-17 15:26:41

Really love the first line and the last stanza. The first line seems so obvious when you say it that I can't believe someone hasn't said it before now.

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